5 traits writing standards portfolio

http://anibednitsua.wix.com/5traits2012

This link is a link to my 1st semester portfolio, this portfolio was easy to create. the hard part was explaining my excerpts and proving that i used the five traits. It was hard because it required deeper thinking and brainstorming. Also time management was incredibly hard since we got this assignment only 2 days ago.

Movie Review

The 2006 documentary film, THIN, directed by Lauren Greenfield, which she produced in collaboration with producer R.J. Cutler and while she was living at Renfrew for six months. THIN is a documentary that explores issues surrounding body image and eating disorders. THIN was selected for competition at the 2006 Sundance Film Festival and won the John Grierson Award for best feature-length documentary at the London Film Festival2006. It has also screened at Hot Docs and Full Frame, as well as film festivals in Chicago, Vancouver, Austin, St. Louis, Ojai, Galway and Sweden. It received the 2006 Documentary Grand Jury Prize at the Boston Independent Film Festival, Newport International Film Festival and Jackson Hole Film Festival. THIN has also been nominated for an International Documentary Association Award.

I watched this not because it was an assignment but because eating disorders and stories I’ve heard about them have intrigued me. Almost everything about them intrigue me, why people have eating disorders, why people don’t get help, why it might be present in females more than males, etc.

This movie really doesn’t have a plot, it mainly focuses on one facility and a few patients and their daily routine as a participant there. It follows Alyssa, a 30-year-old divorced mother of two, and traces her eating issues back to an incident when she was 7 and put on a diet. She describes massive binge and purge sessions, which resulted in hospitalizations due to the resulting dehydration and her severe abuse. 

Brittany, 15-year-old student who was admitted to Renfrew with liver damage, a low heart rate and hair loss after dropping from 185 to 97 pounds in less than a year. She describes herself as a compulsive overeater from the age of 8, leading into compulsive dieting and anorexia from the age of 12 and a craving for acceptance amongst her peers as her motivation to lose weight. Polly, who was attempted after a suicide attempt after eating two pieces of pizza. And Shelly a 25-year-old psychiatric nurse who enters the Center at the beginning of the film with a PEG feeding tube surgically implanted in her stomach. She admits herself into Renfrew after ten hospitalizations. On her arrival she weighs 84.3 pounds, having been anorexic for six years

Angry Letter Draft

(Your Address)

(Your City, State, Zip code)

November 15th, 2012

98-1005 Moanalua Road

STE 600

Aiea, HI 96701

(808) 483-5339

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Dear Pearlridge Theaters Administration,

My family and friends have been satisfied and happy customers since kids. Your reasonable prices, great employees, and wide selection has kept us coming back to entertain our selves. However we have had some issues lately with your seating appliances and cleanliness. This past weekend my family and I have visited we were satisfied by the wide selection of movies and friendly staff.

As we were seating our selves in the theater we saw black stains on the rug and oily floors even after the janitor cleaned it. Then while we were sitting my little brother had almost fallen from the oil and butter on the floor while getting up to use the restroom. Also as we were leaving we had felt as if we were bathed in popcorn butter and people waste. We felt dirty, oily, and stink, we have been satisfied for years but now the facilities are out-dated and dirty.

Also on more than one occasion we have felt gum under the seats, on the ground, or fresh under our shoe. We are a clean and organized family so it couldn’t have been us. We only as that you take the time to fix your theaters. We know that you guys have new management and its hard to run an entire mall, but neglecting it wont help either, it will only hurt sales, and bring down the malls reputation.

Too add to the list near the end of the hall were the farthest theaters are it seems scary, dark and uninhabited. It has rare activity, which gives us the impression that we are not welcome. It also looks neglected, inside especially. We understand the employees cost money and money is hard to get.

Besides the cleanliness the staff is mostly nice and helpful and your restrooms are well kept. We like the arcade games to keep our selves busy.

Sincerely,

Austin Debina-Bautista

Eating Disorders 1st Draft

                 Eating Disorders, there are three types of eating disorders Bulimia, Anorexia Nervosa, and Binge Eating. Although thought to be a joke, eating disorders have killed many, caused many other liked illnesses – like depression – and is very difficult to discover in someone. Eating Disorders has affected many families in the US. It has killed million and caused others to have life long injuries. Now days you may think that since we have rehab and heath center that we don’t need to worry, but most people suffering are not getting help.

                  In the US research has proven that some cases of ED (Eating Disorders) was through genetics or event that has happened while they were children. Things like trauma have caused ED’s or Insecurity. (“A genetic link to anorexia nervosa” by Tori DeAngelis: apa.org/monitor/mar02/genetic.aspx) "This is the first genetic linkage finding we have in anorexia, so we're quite excited," notes the study's first author, Dorothy Grice, MD, of the University of Pennsylvania's department of psychiatry and Center for Neurobiology and Behavior. This article was posted March 2002 so it is 10 years ago, but it doesn’t mean it’s not valid. If anything it would mean there is more research done. 

On the other hand another set of research taken before 2002 says that between 1996-2000 eating disorders found in every 100000 person 60 to 40 people could be affected. (Chart 1: bjp.rcpsych.org/content/186/2/132/F1.expansion.html) The research done to reach their conclusion may be done 10 years ago also, but this could mean that since we have progressed in technology and intelligence that we could be having less and less people affected.

In contrast more RECENT research has been discovered. At least 50,000 individuals will die as a direct result of their eating disorder. Up to 10 million females and 1 million males struggle with an eating disorder, such as anorexia nervosa, and bulimia. Millions have experienced binge eating more. (disordered-eating.co.uk/eating-disorders-statistics/eating-disorder-statistics-us.html) Since this research has been taken more recently, this would lead us to the conclusion that Eating Disorders rates today are extremely high and are effective in ruining a person’s life.

Today we have rehab centers and hospital to treat ED’s but not every one utilizes them. Many refuse the treatment because they think it is ok and healthy for them. Millions die or have problems with ED’s, and many just pass it off as no big deal, but those who have been affected know it isn’t. Thiers children have died or their brother or parent or grand parent. Eating Disorders do have a big impact. Eating disorders are real and they are deadly.

Brainy Pik

College Essay Draft

Austin Debina

9/7/12

English

NYU College Essay Draft

Topic: Indicate a significant person, historical/fictional/local/relative who has an influence on you.

Describe an event that has had a great effect on you.

            Over four years ago I had reported her to Child Protective Services, since ten she holds it against me. I understand now how foolish and selfish of me it was to do that. Now she is going to be in their system forever because of one incident that was entirely my fault. It was my fault for the lecture and my fault for receiving my discipline. I owe it to her to do what ever I can to pay her back. My mom has done May things not just for me but also for my whole family, including her parents and brother. No just with money or labor, but also with her love. Her love and support is what has brought me to where I am now, I may not be perfect but I am a good kid.

            It was a normal day, like any other except in school I had received detention by my elementary school teacher. Now my teacher is really polite and sweet but what had done was very naughty. My teacher is a short middle-aged lady with light straight brown hair and she leans more on the skinny side rather than portly. So what happen that day was we were in our small 5^th Grade class with all the lights off and we were watching a documentary on something I didn’t care about. I wasn’t paying attention instead I was chatting with my friend. When we finished the video and the room went black, to be funny I crawled under the table ever so stealthy in order to scare my friend. Instead I had bitten his hand, at first it was supposed to be a small bite until I had some sort of spasm.

            He screamed and the lights came on and I was blinded from being used to the dark, my teacher had yelled, “What happened!” “I…I…I was bitten. He bit me!” He screamed pointing to me. “I was just trying to play!” I said. “I was just trying to make him laugh” At this point I knew I was busted, I knew she was going to give me detention, send me to the office and call my parents, all in that order which is what she did.

            I had just gotten home from school hoping that when they said they would call my mom they were just scaring me. But instead she came right up to me yelling and scolding me. I can’t explain what she said because it would be too inappropriate if I were to. After yelling and yelling and more yelling she finally stopped and it was silent. She talked with a calm voice with a hint of anger when she asked me why I did it.  So I explained which is what set her off, she approached me hands clenched.

             She didn’t punch but she gave me the worse spankings of my life, which is why I though it was abuse and told her to take me to Child Protective Services. She took me there but what they said was “Its not abuse, you just got spankings which is allowed.” I realized even after reporting her for something I did she still loves me and supports me in every thing I do. Through thick and thin she is always with me supporting me even if I’m wrong, she’ll do it because I am her son.

After crying I went home which was followed bye a long lecture from my dad and a 1-month punishment. After punishment I said I was sorry and carried on with the rest of my life. Now every time I get in trouble it’s always “Well Austin as the older one you are not the good example which is what your supposed to be, especially since you reported me.” Or “Now I can’t touch you or else you’ll just report me to CPS”

Till this day she stands with me, guiding me and also helping me make my way to adulthood. She gives me advice about how to go about my way in high school, even though sometimes I don’t listen. She still tries even thought I reported her.

           

           

COA Poster

Word Choice Graphic

A black man sits patiently while waiting for the chair that will bring him his death. Also the silence and focus of the 5 haole officers make him worried yet serious.

College Essay Topic

New York University

New York University- Ticsh School of Performing Arts and Music

AMDA Performing Arts New York & Los Angeles

 

Topic: (New York Ticsh Schiool of Performing Arts and Music)

Evaluate a significant experience, achievement, risk you have taken, or ethical dilemma you have faced and its impact on you.

Discuss some issue of personal, local, national, or international concern and its importance to you.

Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.

Describe a character in fiction, a historical figure, or a creative work (as in art, music, science, etc.) that has had an influence on you, and explain that influence.

A range of academic interests, personal perspectives, and life experiences adds much to the educational mix. Given your personal background, describe an

experience that illustrates what you would bring to the diversity in a college community or an encounter that demonstrated the importance of diversity to you.

 

Topic of your choice.

Poster Draft

Coming of Age Final

A whole different place, and a whole different world, it’s my first day of High School. I realize when there are no adults to help me find my why that I have to grow up; I have to become a teenager. I have to mature more, I have to grow up, I have to think about my future. That’s all I kept thinking of; I have to do this, I have to do that, I, me, and only me.

 I see no recognizable faces, no help at all. I am truly alone and now I have to think, I have to make friends, I have to make friends, I have to make friends. How do I start? I haven’t done this in years. How did I ever make friends? This is impossible. Okay. So I can go with the cool guy flow, or the little kid who needs help. Wait. Why don’t I just be me?

His name was John. The first kid I ever made friends with. His name was John, he was in my Homeroom class, he had black hair, glasses, and he was Asian. We met on the third floor of the building. At first we both stood there not knowing whether to say hi or wait till class started. Then he came up to me.

“Hi”

“Hi!”

“My name is John. What’s your name?”

“Austin.”

“Is this your class” he said pointing to the closest blue door.

“Yeah, is this yours too?”

“Yeah.”

That’s pretty much how our conversion went after that it was just standing there thinking what of something else to talk about. As we stand there waiting for the bell to ring I look down and spot each set of kids laughing and talking to one another. They must all know each other from somewhere I thought. They’re also not looking to make any more friends, so talking with them wouldn’t help.

Finally the bell rings and we head into class, I chose the seat next to the door. I chose this seat so that I can see who’s in my class, and to be ready to run out if something happens. I sit there watching people come in, girls, boys, and lost kids trying to find there class. We start off class with the some old icebreakers and name games, which I don’t participate in. Instead I’m thinking look at theses kids there so tall! They all have no problem talking. Look at the walls, there’s Japanese writing all over. She must be a Japanese teacher. Look at the beautiful view of Honolulu. Look at how high up we are. Holy Crap!

At my previous school all the way down in Waianae I already had friends. I didn’t have to worry; instead I was the one ignoring the new kid. I was having all the fun. I knew everyone in that small little Charter School, from 3^rd graders I met in my Mentoring Class all the way to the 9^th graders. I was 8^th grade and I was pretty popular, but when my mom told about how far behind I was in education I was stunned. I was ready to go to Moanalua High School or so I thought. I thought the same funny guy, class clown would get me my friends, but not anymore instead everyone though I was irritating which was worst.

The rest of the day was spent in that classroom, that boring classroom that I had no friends in until break came, which I didn’t know what to do then. I walked the whole third floor over and over and over again. Then I remembered something, I do have someone to go to, my cousin. I went to the closest classroom and borrowed the phone to call her since I didn’t have a phone.

Ring. Ring. Ring.

“Hello?” She said

“Rave?”

“Yes?”

“Its Austin, Where are your?”

“I’m where we were supposed to meet up”

“Okay I’m on my way”

When I finished with the call the bell rang. Crap, Crap, Crap. I’ll just have to wait till lunch.

Lunch had arrived and I walked out of the class, down the stair where there were kids just like me; no friends, no one they knew. Except I knew someone, and I was headed to her right now. I reached the bottom of the stairs and saw the massive crowd all over campus. I wasn’t used to so many kids, I was intimidated they looked like an army. People were looking at me, staring, laughing, and talking about me. I ignored them as best as I could as I made my way through Mene Square. I reached my destination after what seemed hours finding my way through the massive army. I reached there but no one was there. I looked around maybe she was somewhere else. But where? I thought. Maybe she went to look for me. I got up to the second floor of the building and looked from up there but I couldn’t spot any familiar faces. I knew time was running out, I probably only had minutes to find her.

At the end of lunch I didn’t find her. I was pissed. I walked myself back to my class. Through the now moving army, up the stairs, and into my cage which was called my classroom.

The end of the day came and I was exhausted, I jumped into the car and rode off. This day couldn’t have gotten any worse. I didn’t make any knew friends except John. I walked around campus alone. And my cousin ditched me, and made me look like a fool. Well, at least tomorrow will be another day, another day to get tortured or stick my neck out there and make some friends. Which one?

COA (Draft)

Coming of Age. Coming of Age has many meanings to many people because each person comes of age in different ways. Some change their entire lifestyle and some just change their behavior. To me me Coming of Age means growing up and maturing into adulthood. Coming of Age isn't like a set thing, so it dosent just happen at the same time for everyone. Some people will Come of Age sooner than others.

What Coming of Age is, is when you make the transition to adulthood.  Which is like going from forgetting or neglecting your responsibilities like chores to getting them done on time. Or from relaxing at home to apply for a job. Coming of Age could also mean Coming of Age to drink alcohol, or Coming of Age to drive, or Coming of Age to get a job at a crappy restaurant, etc. When a person Comes of Age is not a set Date and Time, or a set age but rather when they are able to accept things in an adult/mature way. Instead of a fist fighting you could walk away.

So Coming of Age could mean anything, but each person thinks different acts different and is different than the person next to you. So every person Comes of Age in their own ways and at their own time.

Changes

My blog obviously has a new look, the new look is simply a template, custom text colors, custom layout, and a new title. I came up with the new title because, when i post something it public so that means the whole world can see it. Also because im posting about me/ about my work/or just my work so its kind of like my stories, hence the name Telling my stories to the world. Thats about it!

Taking a position: Tourist Saftey, Who's to Blame?

Many years tourist have come to these islands and have seen many sights, yet there are a few who  abuse the privilege to see these. They try to act cool but they end up acting a fool, like David Potts, a 44 year old tourist from California. He wanted to be cool and dance around the blowhole at Nakalele Point on the island of Maui but he ended up getting hit by a wave and disappearing into the blowhole. After a three day search they didn't find him. Even thought the property lacked sign's of warning Potts should've still had known that doing such a stupid act would not bring any good to him. I don't know what he was thinking but if I could tell him some thing right now I would let him know to stay away from the blowhole.

Potts isn't the first person from outer island to get hurt, a day after Potts was swept into the blowhole there was another incident at Hawaiian Paradise Park. Paul Tam Mai, a 22 year old guy also from the state of California, was killed when a wave knocked him off the cliff at the park and swept him a whole football field from shore.These incidents have caused a rumor going around saying that maybe the land owners should be held responsible.

To blame the land owners for such incidents as Potts, is wrong, the idiocy of one shouldn't punish another. I understand that the family needs someone to blame but maybe they should think who really caused it, and that person is Potts. When he chose to dance near the crashing waves he put himself to risk. I've been in situations where i've tried to blame my mistakes on something/someone else but in the end it was almost always my fault. So maybe next time you're about to do something stupid you should stop and think what could happen, or else just be ready to take the punishment.